=14px[b][ooc section][/b] [b]Steam Name : (TGFTW)Gamerzilla21[/b] [b]Steam ID :STEAM_0:0:70829140[/b] [b]How long have you been playing on the server? : abought 1 day[/b] [b]Do you have any experience within the CCA? If so, what was the highest rank you've ever achieved? :no i do not [/b] [b]Do you undertsand that abuse and/or failure to roleplay correctly will lead to an immediate de-whitelist? :i understand and am here to role play[/b] [b]Give ten detailed lines of RP as a unit that demonstrates you understand P2L. (Scenario of your choice.) :heated argument[/b] C45:CCA-CHT.04626:As me and my partner are patroling the streets we see two men in an argument that is starting to get out of hand. I ask my partner (C45:CCA-FTY.XXXXX) if we should stick around just in case. C45:CCA-FTY.XXXXX:yes we should we dont want this to break out into a fight he said. and right when he said that one of them threw a punch. C45:CCA-CHT.04626: i walked over and tried to split them up. when that failed i took out my stun stick and hit the one on top of the person on the floor witch made them fall over. C45:CCA-CHT.04626: I told my partner to help the man off of the floor and onto the bech next to her. C45:CCA-CHT.04626: RIght after i turned around to tell my partner, i turned back and got punched in the side of my face C45:CCA-CHT.04626:The punch staggered me for a few second's and i dropped my stun stick. Once i regained balance i procedes to puch them back witch put them on the floor. C45:CCA-CHT.04626:before i got them on their back the grabbed a broken bottle on the floor and cut me accros my leg deep enough to make it tear my pants and make me bleed. C45:CCA-CHT.04626: I worked through the pain and got the bottle out of their handsbut they then kicked my in my chest hard enough for me to loose my breath. C45:CCA-CHT.04626: My partner got out his stun stick and hit him a few more times with it. C45:CCA-CHT.04626:as i got back up my partner asked if i was ok i told him i was it just knocked the breath out of me and after that i helped him drag the man away. [b][IC Section][/b] [b]Character Name :Benjamin[/b] [b]Character Age :28[/b] [b]Character Gender :male[/b]  [b]Character CID :04626[/b] [b]Write at least two paragraphs explaining the backstory of your character that wishes to join the CCA. : Benjamin was a boy who grew up in the bad side of town. Always having to go to extreme lenghths to get money and to survive. at the age of 12 he had to witness his dad get jumped and murdered in front of him. That incident scared him for live and he slipped into depression. By the time he was 14 he was getting into alot of trouble with police. When he was in his mid teenage years he would allways not follow the rules and not listen to anyone no matter who they were, not even his own mother. as he continued to get into more trouble he got deeper and deeper almost to where he couldent get out and away from what he is doing. and with each day he got even more deppresed but held it down for many years. Finally Benjamin realised he needed to turn his life around and if he wasnt able to he would keep trying. The thing that made him realised needed to straiten up was how his mom started acting. she was really depressed as well even more than Benjamin. As one day Benjamin came hom to find his mother crying. He ignored it at first but after an hour of her crying he asked what was wrong. His mother looked up and through tears she said it was Benjamin. Benjamin was hurt by this and asked how he had hurt her. She told him since his dad died Benjamin has not cared abought anyone or anything and never listened to what she was trying to say. She said Ben was very selfish since he would only do what ould make him feel better, and not do anything for his own mother. Ben realised what he was doing and told her he will do better.  Over the next 2 years ben was still very depresed but giving his all to do better. Ben not being 16 though he should be more mature abought everything. and at this point on he knew what he was going to do with his life. he was going to become a police officer so that ha could maybe, just maybe keep other kids from becoming like how he was. Now years later when ben is 21 he trys to join the police force. It was not easy cause of his criminal record. But to no avail they gave him the duty of protecting the people. He was hated by most oficers cause they thought he was still another criminal up to no good just being a cop to try to cover it up. Ben did have one friend and they were partners,two people with almost exactly simmilar backrounds. After him being in the force for a while they all started realising he was trying to turn his life around. Once they saw that in him they exepted him and he bacame just like the rest of them. [/b]

I feel as though your roleplay really isn't well thought out and is quite lacking. It doesn't flow very well and is written rather poorly in regards to grammar and syntax. If you want to get accepted, I would start by rewriting that.

As stated by Darre, the RP lines need to be revised. It'd be nice if the backstory included some on where he was during the Combine invasion and how things went for him.

Fix up the app before I throw in my 2 cents.

This application hasn't been fixed after suggestions to do so. The backstory isn't necessarily bad but there are parts that would be more useful to include as Kibbles stated. The RP lines require revision. I haven't yet seen you in the server, so I can't really comment from my experience there to try to counteract these negatives. Like every vote I make, I'm always willing to change if I get reason to, but no effort has been made to improve this application yet. I [color=#e74c3c][b]can't support[/b][/color] this application in it's current state, I'm sorry.

I think the most important part of an application is the roleplay example, as it shows off how well you can rp in the server. Its extremely lacking in my opinion, and it hasn't been fixed yet. [b][color=#e74c3c]I can't support it[/color][/b] unfortunately.

Haven't seen you RP and your scenario doesn't show an actual fight going on. Pretty much what everyone else has said. [size=120][color=#e74c3c]-support [/color][/size][size=100]for now[/size]

There have been no attempt at improvements, and you have been quite inactive. This is denied.