[OOC Section] Steam Name: Ozymandias Steam ID: STEAM_0:0:5798786 How long have you been playing on the server?: About three days Do you have any experience within the CCA? If so, what was the highest rank you've ever achieved?: I have experience with CCA, the highest rank being 02. I could have gotten high but the DvL never joined the server. Do you undertsand that abuse and/or failure to roleplay correctly will lead to an immediate de-whitelist?: I do Give at least ten detailed lines of RP as a unit that demonstrates you understand P2L. (Scenario of your choice.):  *** A citizen runs past a lone CPU **C17:CCA-UNION.i5.72154 sees the citizen running past. C17:CCA-UNION.i5.72154: <:: Hold it!::>  **[Male | 6'0 | Brown Boots...] continues running after hearing the officer, now being afraid for his life. **C17:CCA-UNION.i5.72154 begins to take a sprint towards the runner, in an attempt to catch up to him ***Passers by watch the chase ensue **[Male | 6'0 | Brown Boots...] makes an attempt to climb the fence infront of him ***The males agility isn't very good, he manages to jump onto and hold onto the fence but isn't quick enough to climb over. **C17:CCA-UNION.i5.72154 slows down his sprint as he comes toward the man, stopping just before grabbing and trying to use his strength to force the man off of the fence onto his back. **[Male | 6'0 | Brown Boots...] keeps a good grip onto the fence, but the running made him quite sweaty, resulting in him to lose grip on the fence from slippery hands, meaning the force used to take him off the fence basically meant he was thrown to the ground. The man was winded and now writhing in pain aswell. **C17:CCA-UNION.i5.72154 speaks through his vo-coder in a slightly out-of-breath manner, while also readying his stunstick "Citizen.. Apply..." **[Male | 6'0 | Brown Boots...] painfully replies through coughing "P-please.. *cough* Help me..." **C17:CCA-UNION.i5.72154 takes back his breath, picking up the citizen by the collar of his shirt with two hands and places him face against the fence. "Citizen, I won't ask again. Apply" **[Male | 6'0 | Brown Boots...] starts to regain his breath, regrettingly answering to the unit. "M-My name is Alex.. Lorrigen... My CID i-i-i-s 019536..." **C17:CCA-UNION.i5.72154 checks the data on his PDA, nodding slowly. [Male | 6'0 | Brown Boots...]: What's going to happen to me? C17:CCA-UNION.i5.72154: <::Something very terrible...::> **C17:CCA-UNION.i5.72154 enters something on his PDA. After a few seconds the PDA bleeps twice and the unit puts the PDA away. C17:CCA-UNION.i5.72154: <::You have been given negative four points.::> **[Male | 6'0 | Brown Boots...] has a panicked look on his face, and looks ashamed of himself. **C17:CCA-UNION.i5.72154 flicks on his stunstick, setting the charge level to medium as he raises it. The unit brings the charged stunstick into a swift block onto the back of citizens head three times to knock him out. **[Male | 6'0 | Brown Boots...] cries out in agony as the first hit connects, oes unconcious on the second hit and falls to the ground on the third. **C17:CCA-UNION.i5.72154 sighs as he takes the man by the back of his shirt collar, dragging him to the nexus. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- [IC Section] Character Name: John Jones Character Age: 32 Character Gender: Male Character CID: 72154 Write at least two paragraphs explaining the backstory of your character that wishes to join the CCA.: When I was born I had quite a good life, I went to a regular school and occasionally got tutored after class in any subject I wasn't good in so I was always up to date with everyone else. As I got older I started to get training to be an engineer. The training was long and tedious every day, always doing maths, and working with electronics which constantly gave me burns on my hands. I had just started my new job as an electrical and mechanical engineer before the war, it was good while it lasted as I was able to gain some more experience in the field of engineering and even find a woman to love. During the war there wasn't much I could hope for but to survive it all with my wife, sadly she was killed in a skirmish between the combine forces and the earth military in the city. I never had time to mourn as there were multiple cycles of city transfers. After the seven hour war I was transferred through a few cities, such as city 4, city 9 and now (industrial) city 17. I did the jobs I was told to do, hearing news about rebellions in each city from passers by. Never payed much attention to the beatings the Combine gave out, doesn't mean I don't have the stomach for it, I do, it's just that some people that stared were brought in on the punishment. During thos moments I thought that it would be better to join the CCA than to be on the recieving end of a stunstick hit. I now had time to mourn each day fter work in my apartment, but it was no use as I had already seen to much and forgotten what her face looked like, just like I forgot what my friends and family looked like.  

The P2L scenario is extremely simplistic and shows very little P2L and doesn't really showcase your ability to formulate a /me, which i think its a crucial point of the app that should be fixed. The backstory is in a similar boat where it is quite boring as it doesn't really give your character any personality or individualism and is also extremely short. Overall boost complexity the vocabulary used and increase length and detail of both P2L and backstory. I'll stay[size=150][color=#000000][b] neutral [/b][/color][/size]until edits are made, if edits are failed to be made i won't be able to support this app. Edit :- Backstory could use a tiny bit more length too it, just expand on what you have and I can support it, your example /mes could maybe be a bit longer but the length of the scenario sorta makes up for it, backstory increase and then your app will gain my support.

[color=#c0392b]-Support[/color] This application is very lackluster. The P2L situation is not detailed. The Backstory is also not detailed and it is very unappealing. Fix the problems and I'll definitely +support you.

The roleplay scenario does not display proper 'play-to-lose' knowledge. I'd improve that first.

[quote][url='http://risehl2rp.mistforums.com/user/196614']Madmonkeypie[/url] said previously: The P2L scenario is extremely simplistic and shows very little P2L and doesn't really showcase your ability to formulate a /me, which i think its a crucial point of the app that should be fixed. The backstory is in a similar boat where it is quite boring as it doesn't really give your character any personality or individualism and is also extremely short. Overall boost complexity the vocabulary used and increase length and detail of both P2L and backstory. I'll stay[size=150][color=#000000][b] neutral [/b][/color][/size]until edits are made, if edits are failed to be made i won't be able to support this app. [url='http://risehl2rp.mistforums.com/user/195401']Darre[/url] said previously: The roleplay scenario does not display proper 'play-to-lose' knowledge. I'd improve that first. [url='http://risehl2rp.mistforums.com/user/220503']TheLawi[/url] said previously: [color=#c0392b]-Support[/color] This application is very lackluster. The P2L situation is not detailed. The Backstory is also not detailed and it is very unappealing. Fix the problems and I'll definitely +support you.[/quote] I've made the edit's to the application

Your RP lines are pretty solid and you got a decent backstory. However, I haven't seen you around much. I'll give it a +Support, but I'd like to see you around a lot more.

I'm somewhat concerned over the possibility of Robocop happening. You've showed a bit better roleplaying here, but its still slightly powergame like. I'm [color=#999999][b]Neutral[/b][/color] myself, but if you can show that you can hold back, I'd edge for a +support.

Ehh... Your RP seems decent and your backstory some what detailed. I'm leaning more towards [color=#ecf0f1]Neutral [/color]at the moment

I have never seen you on the server and you haven't logged into the forums in over a week. I therefore [color=#e74c3c]can't support this.[/color] EDIT: Due to a lack of activity, this application is [b]denied.[/b]