[OOC Section]  Steam Name: Wumbolio Steam ID: STEAM_0:0:86660199 How long have you been playing on the server?:  A day. Why do you want to roleplay as an Enslaved/Free Vortigaunt?  I very much enjoy vortigaunt roleplay, especially enslaved. Do you have any experience roleplaying as an Enslaved/Free Vortigaunt?: Definately, about seven years worth of it. What do you know about the Vortessence? The vortessence is both biological and spiritual to vortigaunt kind, they feel the universe is made of 'vortal cords' which they take energy from, to be used offensively, supportively, or somewhere in between. Give at least ten detailed lines of RP as either a Free or Enslaved Vortigaunt. (Scenario of your choice.): **The air would be crisp, a bit too crisp, actually, upon closer inspection your nostrils can pick up the scent of smoke. Metropolice would be running to a large building that is on fire, draggiing vortigaunts with them as OTA follow suit.  **MPF:UNIT-01 Would proceed to start assembling some sort of fire-hose, similar to one used before the war. The nozzle, however, appears more suited for a pressure washer, and rather than spray down an entire building looks like it's for getting the cracks in between sidewalks. **MPF:UNIT-O1 Then barks at the nearest BIOTIC to start assisting, pointing to a station where citizens and units alike are filling large buckets with water, the bright lights coming from visors and buildings alike blind the vort as it would stumble, eventually finding the water bucket. **The BIOTIC in question would then waddle their way over to the building, as bodies and debris fall from said structure, it would dump the bucket of water over some smoldering debris. After doing so it rather quickly waddles back to get another bucket, and this process is repeated as OTA units and MPF units go inside to put fires out that are lingering within the building. Eventually, after a few hours of hard work on the lungs and bodies of the citizens and vorts alike, the building is put out, and the building is locked off until it can be rebuilt.  **All vortigaunts would return to the nexus to find that there is no reward, as usual, for the hours of work they had done, no, they sit and watch as their overseers and alike receive rank-ups and commendations for their heroic work, before heading back out to patrol and the like. **The vortigaunts would head back out with their units, sweeping up debris as Citizens, stressed as they may be to do so, thank and praise the officers, unable to even speak to the Vortigaunts let-alone watch them for a considerable amount of time before having to move along to other parts unknown. **All is normal in the city, as the event of the day is over. A building is gone, quarentined off by the rubble within. Each and every biotic knows it will be their responsibility to both free the building of it's debris, as well as repair the thing. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- [IC Section] Character Name: Bim'Kallah Enslaved/Free?: Enslaved, free, or both. Preferrably both. Write at least two paragraphs explaining the backstory of your Vortigaunt as to why they're either Enslaved or Free.:  Bim'Kallah has grown to be a vort of the third elder council of Zanos, the Xenien central hub of community in which other species of the homeworld would flourish in hiding of the Universal Union. Much like his elder peers, Bim'Kallah is that of a gifted vortiguant at heart, expressing their alien values to it's fullest. Beginning in the third trivolanian era of the Xenien callender, of 29401 Z.I, Bim'Kallah was born from his mother Zal'Chan and Dy'Lach 'Vel in a long birthing process of 12 and a half hours. His first weeks of external-development were spent being aided by his teachers in the way's of his vortessence flux, learning the native tounge of his species in a few simple months on the human timescale, translating to several years for a Xenien species, especially that of a vortiguant. Due to his ancestral ties to the Zanos region of Xen, he was given the upperclassed teachings from his elders, learning at a young age the way of the vortessence and their powers. He quickly grew acustomed to their peaceful ways and gentle hearts. At the young age of 103, he was accepted in the Elder's Brotherhood, where he took his place of attainment of the higher one. This was the time in which the the Xen to Earth portal had been discovered. He remembered seeing his father sucked into the abyss of the hole himself, unknown to the horrors that might be on that other side. Thus was a dark time for the Xen homeworld. Within those 48 Human hours translating into several weeks vort-time, he was unsure of his father's condition, or if he was safe at all. Suddenly; he could see the massive dropships with the bright orange and black Union logo breach through the skies of Xen, their synthetic troops rampaging the distant islands floating in the sky. Not long after the Universal Union's breach of Xen through the Earthen portal, Bim'Kallah was captured himself Much like the others, himself and his fellow vortiguants were rather immedietly enshackled, and forced onto large musty, crowded dropships headed back down to the Earth below, where he and his associates would be placed under the hard labour of the Union. His initial drafting was placed in City 62, Moscow Russia. There he would work tirelessly for several years under the Union's domain, until a natural disaster had left the Former Russia's capitol aflame, where he was transferred to City 17...  

I haven't yet seen you in the server but this is a pretty nice app, so I'd be willing to +Support.

I believe you do understand how to RP as a Vortigaunt along with a basic understanding of them. However, I really feel as though your RP examples were weak. I believe you focused too much on the CCP aspect of things instead of the Biotic side of things. More specifically, I think you should have the Vortigaunt be more involved. Do more actions, and go into greater detail. This is my only personal gripe about the application. I also believe your backstory was phenomenal. You provided a very sophisticated backstory that I believe is VERY unique and great to read. You blew my mind with your backstory. I loved reading it but I feel as though I am on the fence about it. I think you should touch up the RP examples and then you're totally solid.  [color=#f39c12][size=150]-/+ Neutral[/size][/color]

When you spend a few hours on a backstory you don't really feel like going above and beyond on an RP example. I don't think I need to touch up one thing when the other makes up for it. I am aware of the linguistic differences of vorts, diet, proper movements when running/climbing, etcetera. On an unrelated note I'm going to find out who wrote the vort abilities guide for this server and see if they'll let me help make touchups. 

[quote][url='https://risehl2rp.mistforums.com/user/246675']Wumbolio[/url] said previously: When you spend a few hours on a backstory you don't really feel like going above and beyond on an RP example. I don't think I need to touch up one thing when the other makes up for it. I am aware of the linguistic differences of vorts, diet, proper movements when running/climbing, etcetera. On an unrelated note I'm going to find out who wrote the vort abilities guide for this server and see if they'll let me help make touchups. [/quote] I respectfully disagree. You can have a phenomenal backstory but RP is literally the sole focus on the server. To me, your RP examples aren't sufficient to make a judgement on my end. But your decision is up to you of course, I can only give you suggestions as a normal player. Good luck.

Accepted, congratulations.